Tuesday, September 25, 2007

It's my life-end

Contd from It's my life

There was happiness in her eyes and as she turned she saw something that she didn’t want to nor expected to. She saw Ajay kissing a girl.

She moved a bit closer to reassure again, he was kissing Monica, his colleague. Tears started to form in her eyes, but she didn’t want to cry. She wiped the one tear that tricked down her cheek. She turned back to leave, but something struck her mind.

Why should I leave? I am not going to sit and cry for what he did to me? I am going to face it. She went closer to him, and Monica noticed her first. Ajay turned around and for a second his facial expression changed.
He was abashed. Without pausing for a second he asked “what are you doing here, who told you to come out of the house”?
“Excuse me, who are you to tell me what should and should not be done. Except for the fact that you’re my husband and you never behaved anything close to that.
How long can a girl suspire for love and affection? Why did you have to ruin my life, if you had someone else in mind? If I had done the same thing, what would be your reaction?”
Her questions pierced his heart like a sharp knife, but he couldn’t answer even one of her questions. There was guilt in his face. But nothing could stop Priya from getting her independence back. She told him sternly that she is going to file a divorce and wanted to end her marriage since there was no hope continuing with a person who doesn’t know the value of a relationship.

She walked away with a confident and satisfied feeling. She could see Ajay looking at her with a blank look.
She closed her eyes for a moment and thought about what Ravi had told her before he went to Singapore…”When it hurts to look back and your scared to look ahead you can look beside you and I will always be there ”.


Priya ran to the phone booth and called Ravi…

Priya- hello…Ravi?
Ravi- hello….
Priya- Ravi
Ravi- Priya…………is that you??
Priya- Ravi………Ravi I need to talk to you. Is that possible?
Ravi knew right from her voice that she was upset about something.
Ravi- I am in my office right now, is it ok if I catch you in half hour?
Priya- yea sounds good enough

So they both decided to meet in a coffee shop.

Ravi was already there, he seemed more tensed than Priya. By now it started to rain, forming images in the window from which Ravi was peeking to catch a glimpse of Priya. As he was busy searching for her, someone tapped his shoulders, it was Priya. He got up and gave a quick hug; they both felt the warmness in each others company. Even though Ravi wanted to keep her in his arms forever, he thought Priya might dislike it. So he pulled a chair out for Priya and told her to sit.
So how are you doing? Asked Ravi
She kept looking at him as though she was seeing some ghost. I must admit that she looked very beautiful. Her wet hair added more beauty.

Suddenly out of nowhere she burst out crying. Priya couldn’t control it anymore. She explained everything that happened in her life from the last day she saw him.
She also added that she didn’t want to live with him anymore because he never treated her the way he’s supposed to. Ravi told her to immediately call her parents and explain to them about the situation. Priya’s parents were very cooperative and they told her to return to India for good. Ravi and her dad talked for a bit about the flight tickets and its expenses.

They were now walking in the road, both of them lost in their own world. Priya didn’t want to go back to her house. She asked Ravi if she could stay with him until her ticket gets booked. Ravi was happy with her decision. Even if she wanted to, Ravi wasn’t going to let her stay in his house.

Ravi lived in a one bedroom apartment in the 8th floor. He opened his door and it was dark inside. He went in and turned on the lights. It smelled very familiar, Indian spices she smiled to herself. The living room was nice and cozy, with a small TV, a black two seater and a small chair near the phone. As Priya was about to enter his bed room he hesitated for a second and asked if she could wait out for 2 min so he could clean up the room. She kindly agreed. He ran in and took all the pictures of Priya scattered in his bed. Placed them in the nearby cupboard and hurried out.

“So here you go madam. I am very happy to welcome you to my room, which will be yours for the couple days that you’re going to spend here.”
Priya laughed and said “does that include bed coffee too?”
“Sure why not” and he rolled his eyes.
Priya murmured “that was cute”
Ravi heard it but he asked again to make sure. But this time she said “nothing”.
Ravi laughed and went and stood in his balcony.
Priya came and stood beside him feeling the fresh breeze that was playing with her hair.
It’s all over Ravi, Priya said wiping her tears. He held her by the shoulders and comforted her saying “everything that happens is for good”.
It was getting late and Ravi told her to go and sleep. She didn’t want to but then thought maybe he wanted some time alone. So Priya went into the room closed the door and lay in the bed thinking about her future. She wasn’t sure what was going to happen. What if Ajay comes looking for me? No she thought. He won’t even notice my absence. In fact he would be happy that I am gone. Gone forever…

Priya was woken up by a thunder, it was cold. She got up to close the window from which the chilly wind was blowing in. The time was 12.30am; she could see the light creeping from the living room through her door. She opened her door to find Ravi standing in the balcony.
Aren’t you sleeping? asked Priya with a confused look in her face.
Ravi turned with a startle “uh..yea not sleepy”
Priya smiled and asked if they could talk for a while. Ravi agreed with no hesitation. They both stayed up all night updating the things that happened.


Priya felt an increase in her heart beat as he held her hands when she was crying. There is no explanation in the dictionary for the way she felt for him. The way Ravi looked into her eyes made her forget all her worries.


Priya opened her eyes to realize that it was morning already and the phone was ringing. She looked around for Ravi. She could hear water noise from the bathroom. She hurriedly got up adjusting her shirt to pick up the phone. It was her dad, she hung up the phone and Ravi came out of the bathroom wiping his face. “Who was it?” asked Ravi… “Dad had called up say that he has confirmed the ticket for tomorrow morning 9.30am to Mumbai”.

Ravi stared at her as she was in deep thoughts. He broke the silence saying “Can I ask you to spend the rest of the day with me if you don’t mind?”
Priya looked at him and he gave out one of his innocent smiles. The killer smile she thought.
“Like I have any choice” she said. And they both burst out laughing.
Suddenly he came closer to her, so close that she could smell the cologne on him. He said “if I was a thief the first thing I would steal is your smile”. She smiled again and asked “what’s the second thing?”
He moved few inches away and said “your flight ticket”. Ravi walked back to his room with heavy heart to get ready for the day.

It was a perfect day with half the sun peeping out. As they got into the car, Priya looked up and saw the dark clouds forming. Her eyes sparkled with extra happiness.
He took her to a restaurant called “Little India”; the food was simple yet satisfying. Lot of things has changed she thought, including her feelings for Ravi.
After their delightful lunch Ravi took her for a long ride. As they were reaching the country side the sky was getting darker.

“Oh please!!, NO rain now”, Ravi yelled.
Priya laughed and said “It’s going to rain”
Looking at Priya’s smile he changed his mind, he wanted the rain to pour now.
It started to rain heavily and they both sat in the car watching the rain. She inhaled the fresh smell of the wet mud. She looked at Ravi and she knew how important he was in her life.
Without him she wouldn’t have made it this far. It was his courage and confidence that drove her where she is now. She was a different person today. She could think better, she knew what she had to do.

It was time for going home, and both of them wished if the day could extend any longer.
Priya packed her things for her next days fly; Ravi sat and watched her pack with a dismay look.

It was 8 in the morning. Priya was leaving today…she gathered all her courage and went to Ravi, sat beside him and handed him a letter. She told him to open it once she leaves. Saying this she walked and vanished in the crowd of people traveling to Mumbai.

He couldn’t resist any longer, he opened the letter which read,

Dear Ravi,
I felt my love for you when I looked into your eyes and all my problems seems solved. I felt my love for you when you held my hands. I don’t understand my own feelings, but then again love is not something to be understood. There are many things I am not sure of; yet, one thing I am sure of is that “I love you”. I have loved you from the day I knew what love was. I wanted to ask you if you feel the same about me.
I wanted to express my feelings to you yesterday when we were going in the car, but I didn’t want to disappoint you on that one day that was left for us.

“Time is too slow for those who wait, too swift for those who fear, too long for those who grieve, too short for those who rejoice, but for those who love, time is eternity.”

I will be waiting for you

Your Priya


* My friend here wanted a very sad ending...i think he is disappointed now..;).....

**quite predictable i guess...if you were in priya's place what would you have done?

39 comments:

Absconding said...

Interesting ending. Went from a committed wife to a 'lover' a bit abruptly..but nice! :D

Hopefully..I wouldn't blog everyday! :D Maybe..only..when I need to let go off some steam!

Raj said...

Nice short story..."Clean" ending...almost fairy tale I should say! I liked it very much. I wish all things real life end as smooth...Happily ever after! :)

Anonymous said...

Really touchy...Predictable! But felt soothing. It was a great read Kavi. Keep up your lovey dovey stuff. but next time, i would like to read something more "erotic" :P

srijithunni said...

Nice story, Kavitha.. read both parts..! You are truly a great storyteller.!

Have Fun, Take Care and God Bless.!

P.S : BLogrolling you.!

With Best Regards,
Srijith.

Raja Krishnan said...

Simply superb.....

I know the story will end with a happy note.... But the way you carried it is really great....

The way you write is the great plus...... The thief stuff, i enjoyed it......

Thank you for giving us, such nice stuff.......

Kavitha Jay said...

@absconding-yea..thats nice merin..:)..u must be busy shopping..:)

@raj-Thanks :D...why did u say "fairy tale"..havent u seen things like this happen in real life?

@vicky-grrrr..nee irrukiye..kadavul kapathattum..

@srijith-thanks a lot pa..do visit often..:D

@rajkingme-hehe..:D...glad u liked it..maybe next time i will try some sad stuff..

Subramanian Ramachandran said...

hey nice story, unexpected ending.... but quiet good...

but there are some flaws as well..... one thing is


>>
Ravi was already there, he seemed more tensed than Priya. By now it started to rain, forming images in the window from which Ravi was peeking to catch a glimpse of Priya. As he was busy searching for her, someone tapped his shoulders, it was Priya. He got up and gave a quick hug; they both felt the warmness in each others company. Even though Ravi wanted to keep her in his arms forever, he thought Priya might dislike it. So he pulled a chair out for Priya and told her to sit.


Chanceless i wud say... visualizing the story till this point, i cud feel how much this moment meant for priya.... So goood...

but after this... i shud say...the lengthening of the story diluted this feel.... donno if u had an ending in the mind...and from this scene to the climax scene u just hurried thru with some scenes :)

:) :) :)

kavi..who is narrating the story?? is it u the author..or is it priya....i think u are too absorbed in ur story..that at times.. u bcame Priya in some scenes :)

>>Ravi and my dad talked for a bit about the flight tickets and its expenses.

>>We were now walking in the road, both of us lost in our own world.

irrespective of all these, the story does appeal to the reader a lot :) Good job

Raj said...

he he...like rs says, u "became the character" in some scenes! ;)

nope, in real life, i havent seen these things happening! But if they r, glad to know that they r happening! :)

Kavitha Jay said...

@rsubras-hey..thanks a lot for ur compliments and for being a great crique..:D..guess this wat happens if i stay up late night writtin it..:)

i have made changes in the places u mentioned..:)...danks again

@raj-corrected..:)
well..i know this has happend to couple of ppl i know...but didnt quite end this way...but this sure does take place..:D

Thenraj said...

hmm...thats how every desi girls in US and UK think of..but how many of them really going for it???

Good story buddy... 5* to u..

prithz said...

Awesome story!!! Loved it! Can completely relate to it! I loved the last few lines which u mentioned about the wait! Amazing!

If there is so much love, there is nothing to fear i guess. Ultimately, its all about being loved, being in love and being happy. In that case, if i were Priya, would surely wait for Ravi.

p.s.:jus updated my blog with a similar mood post :)

HaRi pRaSaD said...

Very nice story Kavitha. Images simply kept forming with ease as I read. But somehow I liked the first part more than the second. The ending line of the first part had a wonderful effect!How wonderful life would be if everyone expressed their feeling for the other person without waiting till it is too late! I too used to write short stories but have not done so for a long time now. I would be happy if you drop in by my blog and read "The Reflections" and give me your views.

You can find it here...

http://thunderthrob.blogspot.com/2005/11/reflections.html

Raz said...

machi. me here di in portland . wil call u today :) and yeah superb work! :) i loved it. i always like happily ever after stories.

gimme another one :) same way. happy ending pls!

Vishnu said...

they lived happily ever after :)

Kavitha Jay said...

@thenraj-tough question pa..it really depends on the gurl i think..if i was in that position...no thinking...i would have left with no hesitation...

@prithz-heyy :)
thank u..n yea ur right..lot of people just get stuck in their relationship..thinking about society n the relatives...
hehe i like ur decision..:)

Kavitha Jay said...

@hari-thanks a lot hari..:)

"How wonderful life would be if everyone expressed their feeling for the other person without waiting till it is too late!"

it really would be great...but then again...we would loose all the suspence n surprise from our lives...
i just think that if somethings dont happen the way it supposed to...its not meant to happen like that...:)
the next thing i am gonna do is read ur story..:D

Kavitha Jay said...

@raz-hehe....YAY ur here...:)
thanks da...sure sure..i will write one for u specially..;)

@the protector-hehe....yes they did..:D

Arunprasad Durairaj said...

Kavi ... kadaisiya ennai comedian akkitiya nee .. adi pavi.

btw, intha story superb ... but guess panna mudinchuthu .. if it was sad ending, it woud have intrigued a lot of reader "Why Priya didnt do this", "Wy not that". etc etc... athukuthan sonnen ...

otherwise, its yet another Kavithaistic Story ;)

Arunprasad Durairaj said...

//if you were in priya's place what would you have done//

Priya was at too many places here.. so i don't see the context ;P However,

If I was at the Coffee Shop where Priya was, I wud have ordered a Frappuchino, extra cream ;)

if I was at Little India, I wud have ordered some Channa Patura :D

If i was at the Airport, with Ravi, avan credit card shoot pannitu escape ahi irupen :P

Where else was Priya :| ?

Jus kidding... thyavu sennchu thitathe ;)

Kavitha Jay said...

@prasad-ahhhhhhhhhh....kadavule enna kaapathu...:P

dai naanum itha sad ah than end pannalam n ninaichen...manasu kekkala ;)...n then i remembered u...seri atleast for prasad i should do something n...ippdi end pannitain...:D

pothum da saami..i got the picture...thank god ur not priya..unnakku mattum eppdi da ippdi elam thonnuthu?? :P

ithulla thitatha n vera oru line...enna kodumai saami ithu

Chris Benoit said...

first time here.. pretty long but sweet story.

Neha Nair said...

OH that was so touching..thanks fr the great story.

KK said...

For now attendance... will read soon :)

dakaltiz said...

kadhaiya mudikanumnu fast ta mudicha maathri iruku... kavs..

yet it was a nice n sweet read...

Ravi oda feelings pathi innum konjam sollirukalam...

wud've been intresting if ravi n ajay had met and had conversation...

okies...n e ways..nice 1..post more such stuff..

Absconding said...

i didn't see the last part! :D What would I have done? I am not sure if I can answer that. Unless one is in her position, one cannot make any kind of prediction of their future actions. I can understand her emotions; but definitely not relate to it unless one is in her shoes! It all depends on how the relationship is going and how much will power I have..to make the relationship work!!

I'm broke. So no shopping. None in India...none in America, for sure. :D

I'll tell everyone in india that my presence is their gift! haha!

Kavitha Jay said...

@chris- hey welcome..thanks a lot..:D

@neha nair-:D..thank u so much

@kk-wogay..take ur time..:)

Kavitha Jay said...

@dakaltiz-yea da..i think i rushed a bit...:P

"wud've been intresting if ravi n ajay had met and had conversation"
i was thinking of doing that...but then ethukku rendu perum sandai pottu adi vaangi..eppovume peace pigeons than paraka viduven...hehe

"post more such stuff"....atha neenga solreengala sir...wokay wokay..;)

Kavitha Jay said...

@Merin-
" I can understand her emotions; but definitely not relate to it unless one is in her shoes!"
hmm..guess ur rite...:)

ur broke!!! what did u with ur salary ;)

pradeepkumar said...

"Even though Ravi wanted to keep her in his arms forever, he thought Priya might dislike it.."

Enough..I got my worth of goose bumps when I read this and visualised the same :). Brings back something which I can never forget :)

Very good ending...I was hoping you will not introduce the stuff about Indian women and all :)....Hopefully Ravi learns...

As most of them have commented, you tend to become the character. Actually why don't you try narrating in first person ? This was a simple story filled with emotions :)...Emotions which we can identify :)....Great post dear. Keep it up.

Kavitha Jay said...

@pradeep-thanks a lot :)
i really should narrate in first person...would be much easier.hehe

seem very busy these days?

pradeepkumar said...

Yeppie...been very busy :(

Absconding said...

WHAT money?? after i pay my bills and all the other 'necessities'...i have barely nothing in the bank!! been trying to save up...but 'emergencies' keep coming up!!! i hope to save up some more so i can meet my own needs in india!

sanjayan said...

Very very impressive. Though the story is nothing different, the way you have narrated it is simply awesome. I can see it as a movie, i can feel the scenes as if it has happened. You have a very good talent of giving life to your words. Keep continuing...

Compassion Unlimitted said...

Once bitten twice shy..a decision on rebound is a most dangerous thing..so the best way is to take a break and fly away

CU

Kavitha Jay said...

@neo-hey how u been? :D
hmmm thanks a lot pa..ur comments have always been a great inspiration to me...:)

@CU-hmm..but i guess this is wat she wanted all her life...
i get ur point..rebound lead to making nasty decisions in life..

gundumama said...

Nice story... Didn't expect such an ending; but worth waiting :)

Keep writing, but don't take too long time to finish.

CVR said...

Neat!!
cinema maari irundhadhu!!

You sure got way with words!!
Groom your talent!!

Some times first person narration from Priya's point of view,sometime first person narration from Ravi's point of view,most of the times third person narration,indha maari maathi maathi vara koodadhu madam!
adhu mattum paathukkonga! :-)

//Went from a committed wife to a 'lover' a bit abruptly..but nice! :D /////
BinGO

Priya says
///I have loved you from the day I knew what love was. ////
then why did she marry somebody else??
:-)
anyways!
cute story! :-)

Divya said...

nice story with a good flow.......really really enjoyed reading it! Kudos:))

Karthikeyan said...

very soon i ll start earning money.. and if i wanted to produce a movie(i dont know)... story will be ours... for sure...