Wednesday, September 19, 2007

It's my life- I



The aroma of food filled the entire house but Priya knew Ajay would least bother to appreciate it. She had cooked his favorite biriyani and kheer and was waiting for him impatiently as everyday. The clock ticked 9.30pm and there he was parking his car in the garage. Before he could ring the door bell Priya opened the door and smiled at Ajay.
“Hello how was your day?”
Ajay just threw her a repulsive look and went to the bathroom to freshen up.
In the mean time Priya set up the table for him to have her specially made biriyani. She was sitting for a while now and noticed Ajay come out of the room fully dressed to go somewhere. Her eyes moved with Ajay as he took his shoes from the rack and started wearing it.
“Are you going somewhere” she asked with a shiver in her voice
“Yes, I am and I won’t be back until late tomorrow”
Priya didn’t want to question him anymore as she knew what his reaction would be. Ajay doesn’t like being questioned or dominated.
“I made Biriyani for you”
“I like biriyani made by my mom, not by you”

Saying this he smashed the door leaving Priya behind alone in the house.
Tears rolled down uncontrollably as she placed all the dishes in the refrigerator. She could not possibly think what the reason was behind Ajay’s behavior. All she wanted at this moment from him was a smile and show of sign that he cared as a token for their 2 month marriage anniversary.

Life was not the same for Priya; she had to leave her parents, friends and Ravi back home after she got married to Ajay. Her thoughts were now wandering about Ravi as she was making her bed. Ravi was her best friend or maybe someone more than a friend. She knew him from her school days. He has always been for her like a guardian angel looking after her.
There were times when Ravi would wait for her class to finish so they both can walk home together talking about all the weird things going around in the world. Everything happened so fast in her life that she didn’t have anything under control including her marriage with Ajay. Ravi was off to Singapore for an official trip when Priya’s wedding took place. She had no choice but to listen to her parents.

Priya decided to change herself after the marriage though. She knew nothing could be done, so she managed to bury her feelings deep down her heart. But the more she tried to push Ravi’s thoughts away the more it came floating towards to her.

Priya was now lying in her bed thinking about Ajay. Right from the day they got married Priya couldn’t think of a day where he tried to make a conversation with her. It was always Priya who initiated and always ended up discouraged. She didn’t know what she did for him to behave like this. She felt hopeless and down. She needed Ravi at this time so she could rest her head on his shoulders and everything would just seem perfect after that. But she didn’t know where Ravi was right now, there was no TV or internet for her to take a peek at the outside world. She has been locked in this house for about two months now and Ajay not once cared to take her out for shopping or even a simple dinner for that matter. She felt a pinch of pain when she thought about her situation. Bearing confusion in her mind she fell asleep waking up in a brand new day, a day that was going to change rest of her life.

Priya opened her curtains welcoming the rays to fall in her face. It was a bit cloudy, it is going to rain she thought with a small curve in her lips. Priya loves when the rain drops kiss her face gently giving a shiver in her body. She simply loves that feeling.

Thinking about rain she was taken back to the days when Priya used to run out from anywhere when it starts to pour and Ravi hated it, he thought it was too childish. He would simply sit and watch her play like a little kid.
She felt ashamed for thinking about another man when she was married now. But he was not another man for her, he was her Ravi. They both had similar feelings for each other but never expressed it out due to certain reasons. Priya knew just by looking at into his eyes, it spoke volumes.

She wondered what Ravi’s reaction would be if he finds out about her situation. She wanted to talk to him, but she didn’t have his number. The only way she could find out was by calling her friend. Geeta should know where he is, she thought to herself. Quickly changing herself to a simple shirt and jeans she walked out of her house. She looked up at the sky; one small drop fell in her forehead. Life is so beautiful she thought. She was happy that she was going to talk to Ravi. This is the longest period of time they both have stayed without talking to each other. It was unbelievable how Ravi managed all these days without hearing her voice. But again even if he tried its not like she had a phone, Ajay uses his cell phone and maybe he didn’t want to call him to ask about her.

She got into the cab and halted at a near shopping mall. The cab driver was kind enough to guide her around the places. He even mentioned about waiting till she was done with her work. She nodded with a smile and walked inside the building. Nothing looked amazingly different to her as she had seen many shopping centers like this in Chennai. But this is huge compared to the ones I have seen she told herself.

Priya was walking around looking for a pay phone. She did manage to find one after 20 minutes. Without wasting any time she quickly called her friend Geeta.
Geeta was shocked to find out that Priya didn’t know that Ravi was in US too. In fact in the same province, he had called the same day Priya left to states and talked with Geeta.

Priya was surprised...more than surprised she was very happy. Her happiness knew no boundaries, she hurried to take out her pen and note down his phone number.
There was happiness in her eyes and as she turned she saw something that she didn’t want to nor expected to see. She saw Ajay kissing a girl.

to be cont..


** oru mega serial range kuduthutaino?
*** well the story is pretty long so didnt want to bore you guys all at once...slow n steady yea panna effect nalla irrukum :D
**** please do critique me...i will learn from my mistakes :)

23 comments:

Raja Krishnan said...

Yup....Not a mega story but like some film...... Good effort... US, marriage, friend, oru round potturikkinga.......? So still many episodes......?


ps: You are a very good story teller... Great....

Raj said...

"It's my life"!! Apdina, Priya is YOUR "mystery" namea?! ;)

Short story/serial...edhuva irundhaalum, episode 1 nalla irundhudhu.

Btw, indha maadhiri showslaam start panradhukku munnaadi "based on a true story" illaati "All characters/names in this story are fictional. Any resemblance to real life is purely coincidental"nu solluvaanga...unga kadhai epdi? ;)

Kavitha Jay said...

@rajkingme- nanri hai..:)
yea got a couple more episodes..probably will cut short it and end it anywhere...ellam ennoda mood ah poruthu irrukku...:)

@Raj-ada paavi...unn kitta konjum jakardaya than irrukanum pola irruke...raasa ennakku innum kalyaname aavale..:P..pluz i dont write stories about my personal life...my life is very complicated to put in words..:)

i have wrote such things in my previous stories...but its understood i guess...adha potta lum yaarum paddikka kooda maatanga..venum na unnagallukaga oru bit podava?..;)

Raj said...

he he...idhukku paerdhaan potu vaangardhaa?! ok ok...unga background theriyaama paesitten...mannichidunga! ;) aana, munnaye sonna maadhiri, kadhai nalla irukku! :)

Arunprasad Durairaj said...

Goood... Naaan sonna mariye kadhaya eduthu pore.. appreciate it.. :D

pradeepkumar said...

I did drop in your blog and took liberty of even commenting on one of your poems :). You do have gift of writing :). I liked most of your poems. Why is that they all are so melancholic :)....Keep up the great skill, "Kid" :)

An old man...searching for his long lost girl :)

pradeepkumar said...

I am a poor phd student..guess where ? IIT Madras (you are a proud chennai girl, right ;)).

Was working on a paper submission. This explains my staying up late :)

Interesting story...let's see where it continues :). Looking like a love triangle unless you gonna introduce a totally new character in next part :)

BTW,
"Ajay just looked at her with a repulsive look.."

sort of looks out of place...since look appears twice in a sentence. You could rephrase it as

"Ajay just threw her a repulsive look..."
or

"Ajay gave her a repulsive look.."

Don't mind my nitpicking..As I said I'm a phd student and it is one my jobs to review papers ..hence this bad habit of correcting and beautifying :)

Oh..last note..Yeah..I am highly romantic --after burning my fingers thrice...I should learn..but you know the matter with heart, right?..It simply refuses to stop loving :).

Vishnu said...

as expected.....

ne ways nalla katha sollra.....

dakaltiz said...

oru range la poitruka nee... kavs...sirikathaigal nu book potruva pola...

well the plot u've taken is complex... i'm eagerly waitin for ravi's entry into the situation.. ;) ... nalal think panni olunga ezhuthu... ;)

Kavitha Jay said...

@raj-romba nanri for ur compliments..:D

@prasad- iru iru..unna maati viduren..yen life oru soga kathai..ithula nee story ya vera soga ma yezhudha solra..lol

@pradeep-poor phd student ahh..aiyoo pavam...padinga sir..nalla padinga..;)
i have corrected the mistake..i didnt notice it untill u pointed it out...thanks for being such a good critque...

Kavitha Jay said...

@ the protector-thank a lot..:)

@dakaltiz-aiyo..romba expect la pannatha pa...yetho ennoda kutti mulaila enna ideas varutho..atha yezhduren..:D

gundumama said...

Good start! Hope the end will also be different. Priya-Ravi love pananga , onnu sernthutaanganu mokkai poda kudathu :)

Appidiye konjam pics ithuku yetha maathiri post panningana kalakala irrukum.

Waiting for part II....

Ponnarasi Kothandaraman said...

Romba naal achu inga vanthu :D Hi vechutu poren..Aprama padichitu comment'ren dear! :) Tata 4 now

Ponnarasi Kothandaraman said...

Bytheway was jus scrolling thru and found Prasad..Is this the Prasad who was missing for few months???

Subramanian Ramachandran said...

hey soooper story.... enakku mounaragam padam paartha maathiriye irukku..not that the story is similar, but the style of story telling somehow reminds me that movie and a couple of some good movies.....

Great!!!!

just towards the end of the Ist part, I thought I got how the story gona move... and like a slap in the face came the next line about my guess of the story :D

however..the negative point is that u have put a pause button..... the risk here is that...if u dont post the next one soon, the interest will get diluted :)

pradeepkumar said...

So..on popular demand..how soon are you gonna finish the story..oops...in a flowery language, "Will true love triumph ? Will Ajay learn to love Priya ? Does Priya go back to her real love ? Does Ravi take Priya back, if she comes to him ?...Watch out for the heart wrenching, mind blowing part 2 that is guaranteed to stir emotions of your heart and leave you dazed by its fantastic ending..By young writer "Mystery"..."

:-)..
On an unrelated note, are you on orkut ?

Raz said...

pavi! oru nalla kathai poduna... atha vitutu ippadi ilukathe. i like the story finish it

Shiv said...

just dropped in to say hi...will read the post soon...thanks for visiting my blog...

Kavitha Jay said...

@gundumama-hehe..now i dont know wat to write...ellarum oru oru maari kathai ezhudha solreengale..
yea..i will try to add some pics..:)

@ponnarasi-vaanga madam...romba busy ya??
yea..athe prasad than...chumma busy ya irrukara maari build up tharuvaan...nambidatha..;)

@rsubras- hey thanks a lot..romba yosichi ezhidinen..:P.
n about the story line..hmm lets see how much u got it right :)
and i will post it very soon...i have a test on tuesday..so right after that this will be updated..

Kavitha Jay said...

@pradeepkumar-hey why dont u finish the story for me..:P
nee kudutha build up ah paartha..ennakke bayama irrukku..:)

@raz-unnakku surya padam vechi story ezhidina than seri...un tholla thaanga mudiyala..;)

@shiv-welcome..take ur time..:)

Raz said...

en rasathi.. surya padam pothu blog poda poriya? loves u 222222222 much

Thenraj said...

Hmm...when some desi girls going to US after marriage, if they read this they may say this is my story.....anyway waiting to see the next chapter r episode...go ahead buddy.

CVR said...

oops!!
i think i commented to soon in the other part before reading this!
Now it fits in!
Sorry! :-)